Phan's move submission

[Phantasma]

Character’s Name & Profile: Kite Kalisto
Devil Fruit & Entry: Kinu Kinu no Mi

• He hasn't actually eaten this fruit, yet.

Current X-Poinz: 527

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Fighting Style Upgrades

Name: 天と地を越えて (Romaji: Ten to ji o koete) Beyond Sky and Earth
Focus: Dual wielding, Weapon Orientated, Combo based, Fast, Precision.
Former Rank: E
New Rank: D (Cost: 200 Xpoinz) (125 Rebate)
New Aspect: Winding

• Following the root principles of the stronger (forte) and weaker (foible) sections of a sword Kite sends blasts of pure vibrations down the length of his knives, sword or fists. 

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Technique Variation Upgrades

Name: アンサンブルフォルテ
(Romaji: Ansanburuforute) Ensemble Forte
Original:

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Former Rank: 1
New Rank: 2 (Cost: 75 Xpoinz) -> (Made free with Rebate) 
Description: Compared to the prior intersection of blades this technique is somewhat the same. It does however eliminate the risk of leaving the user open and instead focuses on the blades or his fists simply contacting or cutting the same target at the same time. Utilizing the Vibration Kite is now aware of he can send two waves into the target from opposing or converging sides. If used to its full extent internal bleeding is possible or maybe even causing weapons and armor to shake wildly (This is accomplished by the vibrations penetrating into sensitive underlying tissues or material), but the aim of the technique is disarming or forcing a quick admission of defeat. Naturally the techniques efficiency is halved if only one fist or blade is able to touch its target for a strike. 

Name: アマチュアコーダ
(Romaji: Amachuakōda) Amateur Coda
Original:

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Former Rank: 1
New Rank: 2 (Cost: 75 Xpoinz) -> (Made 25 Xpoinz with Rebate)
Description: Ideal for opening battles, this much hasn't changed, Kite quickly unsheathes his knives and prepares to land a strike. Yet by drawing those knives and using a certain Aspect of his fighting style the swordsman can intensify the noise of the action. Ordinarily silent the draw becomes a practical noise grenade as it pollutes the air with a cringing quality much like that of nails on a chalkboard. It only gets worse the closer the target is to Kite and can lead to temporary hearing loss if they're especially unlucky and happen to be inches from Kite. Rather than subject himself to the full brunt of the technique Kite is able to somewhat direct the noise in a cone in front of him. Yet that still doesn't change the fact it usually hurts his hands thanks to the knives wobbling around, thus minimizing the amount of times he can use it. To use the ability it's also imperative that he re-sheathe the sword and draw it again.

Posting this just in case I need to upgrade my FiST for the new weapon I'm purchasing for Kite. I'm also fully aware I likely don't have enough Xpoinz to purchase these moves and the weapon, but that could easily change when my threads are graded. I apologize in the event this is the case as I've gone and gotten ahead of myself. 

[Jade]

Heya! Sorry for the delay. We've got some issues, so let's get right on in there and get those taken care of.

• FiSt Focus, Description, and Kite's Profile
  Sooooo, this is a weird one, and I do feel bad since I just noticed it. On Kite's profile, his FiSt does not use the proper template - that's ultimately fine, except for the fact that it is lacking the Focus and Class descriptions. Furthermore, we seem to have a bit of confusion over the Focus and Description here in this application - the FiSt's Focus should be a handful of simple "keywords" used to describe the FiSt's, well, primary foci. Could you please ensure that you fix this up and make sure to add the information to Kite's profile?
• Winding
  After discussing it with another staff member, we agree that the new Aspect to the Beyond Sky and Earth FiSt is not going to work in its current state. As it exists right now, it sounds as if it wants to be something like a video game enemy debuff, which simply isn't going to work, while also giving Kite a very peculiar control over a broad theme of "vibrations". While I understand that there is perhaps a scientific reasoning behind these things, I think it may be better to go back to the drawing board and consider the theme first and foremost.
  
  At best, this Aspect as it currently exists feels like it may be two Aspects and a Trait rolled into one package. At worst... I don't want to say that the idea is outright unapprovable, because I don't believe that is the case, but it isn't in its current state. I would also say that this may be a case where some confusing verbage is obfuscating things and making the Aspect sound much more broad than it actually is, so if you truly feel that this Aspect can work, I would suggest rewording it in simpler terminology in order to get the idea you're shooting for across better.
• Technique Variations
  Given that Ensemble Forte and Ameteur Coda both make use of the Aspect being called into question, there isn't much more feedback I can give on these at the moment. My apologies.

I know from our own conversations that you're having some computer issues at the moment, so get back to us on these things when you can. If you need assistance reworking or just rewording the Aspect, I would direct you to do so in the appropriate channel in our Discord server!

[Phantasma]

For the sake of prosperity, finished those changes. Sorry for the mixed signals I gave.

[BlacKitten]

Things to change:

• Ensemble Forte – Please just describe the action of your technique. Avoid talking about the results of your technique as if they will absolutely happen. This is notable in “The result being a deep pain and pressure if it's on flesh (this is due to the waves traveling deep into tissues) or if upon a weapon somewhat unpredictable shaking.” This is not a problem in your other sentences because you use the words like “can” and “possibly”.
  

• Amateur Coda - Remove your ability to sense vibrations such as feeling heartbeats via touching the ground. Your trait, as described, is strictly generating vibrations. Gathering information from sensing vibrations does not align with the description of your Winding Aspect.
  

• If you want, I believe you can update your Current X-Poinz because a thread with a certain cat-girl is graded   .

[Phantasma]

Done.

[BlacKitten]

Approved!

[Phantasma]

Character’s Name & Profile: Kite Kalisto
Devil Fruit & Entry: Kinu Kinu no Mi

• He hasn't actually eaten this fruit, yet.

Current X-Poinz: 950

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Fighting Style Upgrades

Name: 天と地を越えて (Romaji: Ten to ji o koete) Beyond Sky and Earth
Focus: Dual wielding, Weapon Orientated, Combo based, Fast, Precision.
Former Rank: D
New Rank: C (Cost: 350 Xpoinz) (125 Rebate)

New Aspect: Fleche

• Channeling a refined version of his wild battle craze Kite can use weapons or his bare hands to slice into or break stone and steel. Augmenting strength he has with an adrenal-like burst of energy.
  

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New Techniques

Name: メトロノーム (Romaji: Metoronōmu) Metranome

Namesake: Instead of being spelled Metronome, it combines the Latin word for "Meters" and the Greek word for "District"/Musical composition.
Fighting Style: Beyond Sky and Earth
Rank: 3 (Cost: 225 X-Poinz) (-25 with left over FiST rebate) (Total Cost: 200 X-Poinz)
Description: Combining high speed movement and semi-controlled flight this technique makes use of both Winding and Fleche. Directing an explosive burst of movement combined alongside the presence of rippling force Kite sends himself upward into the air or momentarily disappears from sight in a quickened dash of blurred movement! Not too dissimilar to the two Rokushiki techniques Geppo and Soru when closely observed even going so far as to give a deeper 'buzz' or 'whirring' noise. Not exactly a full ten kicks in a second at the speed Kite travels and the distance he's capable of leaping, and staying aloft, he might as well be. Frankly applying extra kicks isn't necessary but is easily possible and is limited under knowledge an over the top gesture like that would sooner break the ground more than contribute to a significant increase in speed; so while this move does provide that much speed there's kind of no point aside from showing off. Should the user choose to, delivery of this technique at that previously mentioned full power into a surface or on a person will yield deadly results. However as this move is mostly designed with mobility in mind all this really results in is an enhanced kick mixed into a feint easily accomplishing breaking bones, dislocating limbs or knocking folks and obstacles over.

Name: 三浦クレッシェンド (Romaji: Miura kuresshendo) Misura Crescendo
Fighting Style: Beyond Sky and Earth
Rank: 3 (Cost: 225 X-Poinz) (Free with Rebates: 125 rank 2 weapon rebate + 100 FiST rebate)
Description: Throwing Cross Charmers with a brutal spin in addition to the fact of infusing a single or both blades with vibrational force. During flight this results in an utterly silent projectile to the point it might seem unnatural, accomplished by the same frequency the energy exerts outwardly as an antiphase noise. With speed that an ordinary person or even experienced warrior might have trouble following the actual effect only is triggered when it impacts with a solid or physical structure. Ramping up in speed and force of spinning the harder the object is to cut into the quicker and more forceful the rotary saw-like action the blade exhibits. Possible by the same force that previously muted the flight of the weapon(s), resonating and amplifying the berserker like strength that had it tossed almost like a windmill being spun in a storm essentially turning resistance into a new source for energy to spin clashing with the vibrations. After cutting into or scoring whatever kind of damage Kite wished for the knife, sword or both knives rebound and boomerang back to him. Rather than remotely activated this return is determined the moment the projectile or projectiles are tossed. Unlike during flight the noise control only muffles the cutting up to an extent rather than completely erasing it. Holding onto and instead spinning the blades or sword within his own fingers or hand is also an option but would otherwise eliminate the sizable range this technique grants.

Name: アレバタール・フォルティッシモ (Romaji: Arebatāru forutisshimo) Arrebatar Fortissimo
Fighting Style: Beyond Sky and Earth
Rank: 3 (Cost: 225 X-Poinz)
Description: Usable only as an unarmed strike and requiring Kite to be within touching distance this technique sacrifices range, use of weapons and other such advantages for pure power. First by cloaking and energizing his own fists with the same calamitous force offered via winding and then punching an animate or inanimate victim. By hitting or touching an object it results in that force, a product of vibrational harmony or dissonance, pouring into and meshing into the surface or appendage once Kite designates a target through a clean hit or touch. Wasting no time between the previous preparation of energy Kite prepares to lash out with a lightning fast jab relying on his own speed and might further enhanced through Fleche. Once hit the energy previously described is applied and spread throughout the point of initial contact while through speed and strength the emerging disturbance is further magnified. Due to moving so very quickly and disturbing an unstably charged object it's possible to shred targets resulting in say a large part of or an entire wall turning into a ruined or destroyed pile of crudely cut ruble blocks of varying but often small sized pieces. Comparable to having a group of razor-sharp blades carve an object from the inside out.

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New Traits

Adamantine Hide: Through weathering tough situations your body has become far more resilient than most. Ordinary pain no longer smarts as much and wounds seem to cut far less deep. All in all thanks to a fusion of training, exposure and experience you've gained the ability to bounce back from far worse. To most folk the lashings and agony you can put up with almost seems unreal.

• 600 X-poinz trait breakthrough.
  

Wolfish Brawn: By occupational hazard or by complete choice your physical might breaks past typical human limitation. Hefting boulders, heavy machinery and even people becomes a task with minimal difficulty for yourself. Whatever limitations you do possess would drift into the realm of fantasy for the average man.

• 1,650 X-Poinz trait breakthrough. 

Amplified Perception: Needing to watch your back and perhaps the desire to exploit the unaware you've honed your senses to new levels of sensitivity. Taste that can appreciate subtle flavors, eyesight that can peer into low light conditions, touch which can nearly read books from raised ink and hearing that picks up on the sneakiest of varmints. It's often that dialing such senses down would be more beneficial. 

• Replacement trait for the redundant Tremendous Stamina trait, Oxygen Efficiency already grants stamina.

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Total Cost

775 X-Poinz

[Suriko]

Approved

[Phantasma]

Character’s Name & Profile: Kite Kalisto
Devil Fruit & Entry: Kinu Kinu no Mi

• He hasn't actually eaten this fruit, yet.

Current X-Poinz: 2091

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Fighting Style Upgrades

Name: 天と地を越えて (Romaji: Ten to ji o koete) Beyond Sky and Earth
Focus: Dual wielding, Weapon Orientated, Combo based, Fast, Precision.
Former Rank: C
New Rank: B (Cost: 500 X-poinz) (125 Rebate)

New Aspect: Sharp

• Representing a focus and projection of attacks. Accomplished through both a steady hand and musical mind set when used together projectile attacks are possible, the production of musical compositions for a variety of effects.

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New Techniques

Name: クロスガードファンファーレ (Romaji: Kurosugādo fanfāre) Quillion's Fanfare

Fighting Style: Beyond Sky and Earth
Aspects: Winding, Fleche, Sharp.
Rank: 4 (Cost: 350 X-Poinz) (-125 with FiST rebate)(-100 with weapon Rebate) (Total Cost: 125 X-Poinz)
Description: By utilizing his own weapons as instruments Kite launches out a radial shockwave of concussive force accompanied by the thunderous symphony of music. The cacophony of sounds serves to further demoralize any left standing after the force of the attack which could just as easily topple whole buildings and rip steel clear from its bindings. At its perimeter the effect wanes but for targets within the immediate vicinity of several meters this attack is at its highest potency. Naturally to achieve the full effect Kite must be allowed to play his music with both hands using some form of instrument as a focus, be it a violin or his knives, sword, so on. An added detriment is that the longer this attack presses the harder it gets for Kite to not get swept away and flung forward in a wild charge. The science behind this technique involves the mixing of several key elements of Beyond Sky and Earth; Vibrations, a body strong enough to handle the strain and anchor itself while continuing to play and finally the means to both project and bring harmony to otherwise chaotic forces which have been shunted out of the hunters own body. To an observer this intense move will summon up an aurora borealis effect with haunting hues of blue, green and purple swelling in the empty air alongside the maestro. When issued to attack or when in the process of shredding a building these curtains of color will curve down and slash forward like tendrils of phantasmal energy delivering their payload. During the beginning of a performance Quillion's Fanfare is a bit more controlled and can be directed or stalled, but as the music continues this starts to erode quickly becoming a continual explosive force up until Kite is forced to end the technique or risk personal injury. In a benign light if used in a noncombat role Kite could play all sorts of music on his weapons or instruments, manipulating their sound to imitate any number of musical instruments. 

Name: ブリッツェンテンポ (Romaji: Burittsu~entenpo) Blitz Tempo 
Fighting Style: Beyond Sky and Earth
Aspects: Fleche, Sharp
Rank: 3 (Cost: 225 X-Poinz)
Description: A grenade of energy summoned with but a snap of the fingers. The accompanying shock wave possesses enough force to knock head sized holes in solid walls be it stone or metal. More of a timed attack these remarkably slow floating nodes will only detonate after an amount of time decided by their user, no more than a few minutes and no sooner than at least a few seconds. A flexible range like this ensures Kite is able to keep his opponents on their toes and means that should he accidentally go into range of his own technique he will have time to make a hasty retreat. Immunity to their blasts is lost upon the swordsmen, but because these are nodes of shock wave force something like a harsh wind would hardly make them budge let alone swing back his way from their determined path. Rather than a physical object these little orbs are entirely intangible and will actually travel much more quickly in a solid target versus the open air. Accomplished through the root themes of Fleche and Sharp, channeling the strength behind a loud snap and encapsulating or projecting the resulting node, this technique is best used when done repeatedly, each snap followed by ten or twenty more in quick succession only stopping when the strain of putting that much power into his hands leaves them sore and shaking. Look wise these deadly, deadly bubbles are like transparent, writhing concentric forms with a bright carmine color no bigger than an average hand that quickly grows darker the closer they are to popping and sending out their stored energy. The noise of the snaps and their explosions are like the sounds of a gun and then cannon going off. 

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New Variations

Name: クリーグ・カンタータ (Romaji: Kurīgu kantāta) Krieg Cantata 
Original:

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Former Rank: 0
Aspects: Fleche
New Rank: 2 (Cost: 125 X-Poinz)
Description: Identical to its predecessor and varying in only one, key regard. The force put behind the extremely, extremely fast drawing of the blade is that much more. In such a way that during the ghost of a moment of the quick draw the material of the blade is strained and forced to shoot out a surprising amount of distance towards Kites intended target. For most ordinary blades this means the blade full tang and all is ripped straight out of the handle and ruins the weapon, sending the metal like a bullet careening towards the target for a nice impalement. For something like wapometal the material is warped and stretched, spaghettified a good distance before it snaps back into shape. On impact, blade whole or not the metal is like an arrow and comparable to a shigan, smacking into the victim causes equal amounts of impact damage as well as the whole stabbed bit. Inexperienced eyes have a good chance of missing the draw and sheathing, but the results of the attack are anything but stealthy. Lacerations, extremely fine and long horizontal (including diagonal or vertical) cuts or deep piercing stabs, all made possible through this barbaric display of strength. The power put into the draw is the greatest and nearly sole determinant of how far this attack stretches out but a good average is many, many meters. Eerily so the flight of the blade itself is silent with the cut hardly issuing out much more than a hiss of air.

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Total Cost

975 X-Poinz

[Flame]

Approved

Edit: Changes made on 1/8/2020 are approved by Flame. Was a wording change from explosions to shockwaves for clarity.

[Phantasma]

Character’s Name & Profile: Kite Kalisto
Devil Fruit & Entry: Kinu Kinu no Mi

• During Saga On High Kite will be eating the fruit, for the purpose of this application consider it consumed.

Current X-Poinz: 1486, pending the approval of this purchase.

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Fighting Style Creation

Name: Plerocraft; Boundless Tailor (Romaji: Seiwaza; Muhen Houkou) せいわざ; むへんほうこう
Focus: Devil Fruit, All Range, Hybrid, Complementary, Weapon Independent.
Rank: D (Cost: 200 X-Poinz) (125 Rebate)
Description: Named after the words Pleroma and Craft the techniques, abilities and logic behind this Fighting Style work to bring a wholeness to the Martial Artist. Without dependency on a weapon but instead Devil Fruit powers Kite aims to have each and every movement have meaning and manipulate the maximum amount of force necessary, nothing is done without reason regarding Plerocraft. Taking inspiration from both the natural and unnatural things in the world this brand of combat is marked by various vagaries and mercurial developments that can easily overwhelm opponents or prevent premature guesswork. Most if not all techniques work together to tackle greater obstacles, offer up long range and short range with everything in-between or beyond.  

New Aspect: Plush

• This aspect represents nuances in silk production likened to a finer level of control. Think of this as the use of unique, bizarre tricks to achieve effects the Kinu Kinu no Mi is mostly incapable of such as sharpened silk, an improved adhesive and so on.

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New Techniques

Name: Trickwire (Romaji: Torikkuwaiyā)トリックワイヤー

Fighting Style: Plerocraft; Boundless Tailor 

Aspects: None 

Rank: 0 (Cost: None)

Description: A mass of very fine strings are loosed from anywhere on Kites body. These threads are notably sticky, fragile and seemingly blend out of clothing or skin changing from whatever texture or color to ghostly white faintly glowing threads.

Name: Highwire (Romaji: Haiwaiyā) ハイワイヤー
Fighting Style: Plerocraft; Boundless Tailor
Aspects: None
Rank: 0 (Cost: None)
Description: At will Kite can turn any part or his entire body into an adhesive surface, this is represented not visually but audibly by the velcro-like ripping noise made when an altered part of his body is removed from an object. Effects may vary but lighter miscellaneous objects can easily cling to Kite, it's advised to not use this on someones hair or delicate skin. 

Name: Skein (Romaji: Kase) かせ
Fighting Style: Plerocraft; Boundless Tailor
Aspects: None
Rank: 1 (Cost: 50 X-Poinz)
Description: Ranging from the size of a finger to roughly the size of a cannonball Kite performs a beam-like attack of silk stretching for several (SEVERAL) meters. The force put behind this attack makes it especially dangerous and gives it a surprising amount of speed capable of leaping very long distances to slam into a target. Accomplished by using the Kinu to create a massive influx of silk within Kites body that can then be blasted away. The immediate tell this technique is being deployed often is when the user designates a target by pointing his finger, the material rushing out from the tip and around the arm like a torrent of water. However this attack can be performed from anywhere on Kite's body. The name is derived from the tangled nature of the fabrics when shot out. 

Name: Pocket (Romaji: Kakushi) かくし
Fighting Style: Plerocraft; Boundless Tailor
Aspects: None
Rank: 1 (Cost: 50 X-Poinz)
Description: Where Skein is a precise attack Pocket is a very imprecise attack, an AoE of sorts that spreads off of Kite. Designed to bind, catch or crush the opposition Pocket is an attack that has sheets upon sheets of woven thick Silk flooding off of the Power Users body. The amount produced depends on how much time is spent on maintaining the slightly taxing ability on average however within a handful of seconds this could redecorate the decks of most modestly sized ships. For those lucky enough to dodge the initial waves of material contact with the covered ground will greet you with a highly adhesive and soft surface fully capable of having you drop straight through a few layers to be bound. What this technique lacks in firepower it makes up for in stopping power. 

Name: Ripcord (Romaji: Rippukōdo)リップコード
Fighting Style: Plerocraft; Boundless Tailor

Aspects: Plush
Rank: 2 (Cost: 125 X-Poinz) (-125 with FiST rebate) (Total Cost: 0 X-Poinz)
Description: Manipulating key points of what makes silk, silk, Kite effectively sharpens a rope or surface of a silk sheet he is generating. Tiny little prisms comprise each strand of fine, unwoven and untouched cloth and by exaggerating their geometry among other little changes it's possible to make something go from soft to sharp. Considerably difficult to cut through this material still lacks the sharpness to cleave through steel even though on its own it can pierce/shatter most things. Interestingly enough despite this shift in the nature of texture the difference between soft and sharp silk is nigh undetectable from just a glance. 

Name: Hardcord (Romaji: Hādokōdo) ハードコード
Fighting Style: Plerocraft; Boundless Tailor
Aspects: Plush
Rank: 2 (Cost:125 X-Poinz)(-80 with Account Rebates)(Total Cost: 45 X-Poinz)
Description: Once exposed outside the Devil Fruit users body this glossy pale white strand is whipped onto, binds together or covers up a target of variable size. The thoroughly mixed silk itself is solid but the outside coating is akin to a glue that sets achieving a steel-like level of hardness or above when left alone for a very short amount of time. It should be noted even without the glue the silk is already steel-levels of hardness. If for whatever reason this is not beneficial the user can instead accelerate the setting process and have the spider-silk like strands at the ready. This technique does possess a critical weakness in that because this is such a radical change it can easily deplete Kite's stamina. 

Name: Rondo Targa (Romaji: Rondotaruga) ロンドタルガ
Fighting Style: Beyond Sky and Earth
Aspects: Sharp
Rank: 3 (Cost: 225)(-125 with Weapon Rebate)(Cost: 100)
Description: A projectile attack that after slowing down will produce a barrier of solid ice. This technique is only usable when done with the paired swords, Winter, and primarily is a result of their freezing quality. Initiated by a flick, swish or subtle movement of the wrist an incredibly cold wave of air washes off the blade in a path determined by the swordsman. Speed is what decides when the ice appears; once the nearly invisible projectile's momentum drops under its launch speed. Moisture is forced together en masse into a wall or crescent like mass with size and thickness relying on the amount of moisture or available water. Usually at a minimum it can be roughly a few meters in height and width with a thickness of a few dozen centimeters, at a maximum the height and thickness might exceed those parameters tenfold. The appearance of Rondo Targa often looks like a faint blue haze before it slows down to solidify. Having this attack rush against exposed skin will result in possible frostbite or an unpleasant numbness, if not encase you in ice due to slowing the projectile down. The transition from air to ice is noted to be quick.

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New Traits

Hair-trigger Reflexes: Some fights can come down to the wire where speed alone isn't enough, but you'd know that since you live for those moments. Intense fighting or supreme stress has molded your body to respond to your conscious or unconscious commands quicker than an average person. 

• 3,150 X-Poinz trait breakthrough.
• Suri said that speed and reflexes were not packaged together so I'm applying for this ^^.

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New Variations

Name: Rip and Tear
Fighting Style: Plerocraft; Boundless Tailor, Beyond Sky and Earth
Original:

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Former Rank: 2
Aspects: Plush, Fleche
New Rank: 3 (Cost: 100 X-Poinz)
Description: Rip and Tear is nearly uniform to the technique it's based on, it sharpens fabric and applies a cutting edge. Where it differs is just how strong this cutting ability is, unlike the parent technique this can easily slice through steel or harder materials. A sudden surge in power has a flex response that forces those little sharp edges to get even more sharp, produces thrice as many razor sharp thorns. Visually the effected silk has a near mirror-like quality that vaguely reflects objects held near it.

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Total Cost

545 X-Poinz

[Jade]

Alright, let's see what we can do. There's a lot of ground to cover, so I'll try to save my overall thoughts until the end.

• Plush
  Quite frankly, I have no idea what you're attempting to describe here. I can infer from the Techniques that make use of it below that you're attempting to use this as a "manipulate the state of silk for various effects", but... What is this mention of "subtle inclusion of resources found within the human body"? You do know that this isn't how Special Paramecia work, right? You're actively turning yourself into silk and generating it - you are not some wacky alchemical mixture of man and silk. When you make silk, you are silk.
• Trickwire
  This feels like it's attempting to be one Rank 1 Technique and one Rank 2 Technique in one Rank 0 package, honestly. The ability to perfectly utilize your sticky silk with the complete strength of your regular body is easily a Rank 1 usage, especially considering the active nature of your Fruit, while the ability to put out strands of silk to actively feel for subtle movements in the air as a method of detecting things as a sort of "sixth sense" would be a Rank 2 "buffing" style Technique.
• Highwire
  This strikes me as a sort of nerfed Geppo-like Technique more than anything. It's a utility Technique that makes coordinated use of your active Fruit ability, but it's not quite "full aerial mobility", so this will need to be a Rank 1 Technique instead.
• Skein
  You've included a line here about how Kite can generate this Technique from "outside [his body]", in what I can only assume is similar to the way Katakuri was able to seemingly generate his "Peerless Donuts"... However, don't forget that this was an application of his Devil Fruit Awakening, and not something Special Paramecia are inherently capable of doing. For reference, because it will come up in my feedback on Ripcord as well, this line is included in the rules for Special Paramecia:
  

  "Special Paramecia generally lack the benefit of being able to find an abundance of their associated material in the environment, and have no ability to control what they have not previously generated."

  
  This unfortunately comes with the additional stipulation that once your produced substance is disconnected from you, you can no longer influence it through your Devil Fruit ability, because it is no longer you. It's one of the great limitations of Special Paramecia compared to their Logia cousins.
• Ripcord
  Suffers from the same issue as Skein, in that it mentions using this ability to influence preexisting/outside materials. This will need to be removed.
• Hardcord
  With the understanding that Kite cannot manipulate silk outside of himself, even silk that he has produced, there is no reason to include the line about assimilating the material back into himself to evade the effects of this Technique should it be utilized against him, since... He can't actually do that.
• Lightcord
  Honestly, I have no idea how to approach this one. I don't understand it's purpose... Other than the sudden ability to bypass two of your Fruit's weaknesses with a single Technique. Unless you can put together a compelling argument for this, I'm going to need you to remove it.
• Rondo Targa
  I was on the fence about this one until I talked it out with Vio - you're effectively utilizing your new weapons' Quality to function as an additional Aspect, which means that this Technique is only possible with Winter. Ultimately, that seems like a fair enough trade off to me... However, the problem becomes that you're very massively extending the weapons' Quality by pairing it with the Aspect Sharp, to the point that this Technique needs to be Rank 3.

Due to hinging on another Technique under review, I cannot offer proper feedback on Rip and Tear at this time.

Overall... I understand that you do these slightly technical and rather flowery descriptions of your Techniques for yourself, Garry, but I need you to understand that this method of writing them out results in a massive headache whenever it comes time to try to decipher what it is you're attempting to describe, on top of obfuscating what the Techniques are actually attempting to accomplish. I'm not saying to completely get rid of these - you can certainly still write them out this way if you'd like - but I'm going to challenge you to write out more concise versions to present for approvals and such.

I know that this is a lot to ask, but, quite honestly, we can't keep doing this. I know that I, personally, cannot provide appropriate feedback when I have to spend over an hour attempting to piece together what you're actually attempting to say with the help of another member of staff.

Anyway... Please respond once you've made the required changes, as per usual. Sorry that this is such a big response, and further apologies for making you wait as long as you have for it.

[Phantasma]

Changes applied. 

• Made plush more specific.
• Reworded both rank 0 moves to be more rank 0
• Removed Skein's outside influence. 
• Reworked Ripcord to influence silk that's being generated.
• Removed Hardcords assimilation part.
• Removed Lightcord, I honestly wanted to propose a way to make this work but I'd rather remove it then the alternative. That isn't me being sassy I just feel exhausted. 
• Rondo Targa is now a rank 3.

I've done my best to to shorten the moves that are going to be reviewed to a readable length-- in approval standards. I am likely to expand upon the descriptions on my profile but not in a way to change or modify the final products here. As you said, I write the way I do for my benefit so I know my limits intimately. 

I apologize if it felt like I was trying to sneak some things in. I still struggle with knowing what my fruit can and cannot do. 

[Jade]

Sorry for the delay here, Phantasma. Everything seems to be in order now - go ahead and update Kite's profile!