A Long Lunch [SUB]

[Jess]

Thread Title/Link:– A Long Lunch
Location/Mission Number:– South Blue, Ciudedela Queendom
Total Post/Word Count:– 37
Brief Synopsis:–
Meeting in an upscale restaurant where Clara is working as a waitress, a perfectly ordinary meetcute between her and Cornelius is interrupted when some bothersome pirates step inside, and start making trouble.
The girl standing up for herself when they begin to harass her, fortunately for her the man she had befriended joins her side, and overwhelms the group with the aid of his powerful devil fruit ability.
Meanwhile Clara defeating their goons outside before they can torch the place with the aid of a flash dial and her trusty mop, the pair reunite outside and ward off the local law, with whom she strikes a deal to pay for the rewards with the bounty money on the pirates, and splits the rest to cover herself and her new friend.
After this resuming their lunchtime, the two sit down to lunch together and ultimately plan to take a little break the next few days by each others sides, feeling they had earned it.


Character Name/Link:– Clara Clemens
Individual Post Count:– 19
X-Poinz at Submission:– 300
Notable Feats:–
Maid an 11/10 cuteness waitress.
Held her ground against a terror of the seas.
Got the better of his goons with her fancy mopwork.
Made an 12/10 big smort deal with the local authorities.
Enjoyed lunchtime with her new friend.

Character Name/Link:– Cornelius Luster
Individual Post Count:– 18
X-Poinz at Submission:– 730
Notable Feats:–
Helped a new girl feel more at ease on her first day.
Stood up for chivalry in spite of his affiliation.
Easily bested the local scourge for their boorish behaviour.
Opted to take the high road in spite of his heroism.
Finally got his lunch, and some company to eat it with too.

[Mr. Moon]

Jess  as Clara Clemens
300 + ((19 Posts X 15 Blues Modifier X 15% Bonus)= 328 XPz)
New Total: 628
Welcome to the D-class!

Aromancer  as Cornelius Luster
946 + ((19 Posts X 15 Blues Modifier X - 10 % Modifier)= 243 XPz)
New Total: 1189
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[Jade]

Hello Aromancer. This is going to be kept brief - if you have any questions about this decision or if you would like to discuss this, Vio and I would be happy to do so privately at a later time. The reasons for your penalization in the grading of this thread are as follows:

• The first and biggest problem is the depiction of Cornelius utilizing his Special Paramecia to negate damage taken to his actual body. To be clear, this is not how Special Paramecia or Logia function; any damage taken to the user's true body cannot be negated, repaired, or regenerated through their Devil Fruit.
• The use of an Aspect's effect to accomplish something without a corresponding Technique, particularly in the case of turning oobleck in Barret's hand into a solid, spiky ball. While some Aspects can be used for flavor without a corresponding Technique in some cases, such as a character with a cold generation Aspect using it to chill their surroundings, instances like this one would require the creation of a Technique.
• Overplaying what a Technique is capable of, in this instance utilizing Doro-Doro Callando (or Calando, possibly, as you have it written out differently in different places) to envelop Tommy's face in a mask of oobleck that he was simply unable to remove, which is not properly represented in the Technique's text.