Ryuji's Dojo

[Blushing z0ro]

Character’s Name:– Resukuie Ryuji
Profile:– LINK
Devil Fruit:– N/A
Current X-Poinz:– 399

3rd Human Starting Trait:

Inhuman Toughness
Ryuji has trained his body and taken many a beating throughout his life and has remained standing for all of it, making his toughness and resilience a cut above normal humans.

[Sam]

Alright Blushing z0ro! Consider this... approved!

[Blushing z0ro]

Character’s Name:– Resukuie Ryuji
Profile:– LINK
Devil Fruit:– N/A
Current X-Poinz:– 735

D Class Trait - Inhuman Stamina: Through constant and almost endless training Ryuji has build up his stamina to be far beyond to common limits of what would called normal for a human.

Name:– Niitenryuu 二天流　Two Heaven Style
Focus:– Dual Wielding Swordsmanship
Rank:– D
New Aspect:– Power Attacks - Yuji has honed his swordsmanship to the point were he can break and cut through hard materials that would be beyond normal swordsmen and blast away opponents.

New Tech

Name:– 真空破斬 - Shinkuuhazan - Vacuum Destruction Slash
Fighting Style:– Niitenryuu
Rank:– 2
Aspect:– Power Attacks
Description:– Ryuji sheaths his blades and gathered his strength to pull out both weapon in a powerful cross slash, resonating in a sonic boom from the vacuum being formed by the blades leaving the sheaths.

XPZ

Original Total Available: 735
Original Rebate: 0

-200 D-Rank FiST upgrade
+125 Rebate
-125 Rank 2 Technique

New Total Available: 535
New Rebate: 0

[Jade]

Hey Blushing z0ro! We've got a few issues to take care of here. First and foremost, you'll need to include an actual description of what the Aspect you're picking up is meant to do - the general effect that it adds to Techniques that include it, with maybe some flavor on how your character is doing it if you feel like it.

The other, and much smaller issue, is that you seem to indicate that Ryuji's Total XPz is dropping by 200 after this purchase in your calculation at the bottom. As a reminder, a character's Total X-Poinz never goes down, as its used to track character growth. I fully understand if this was just a clerical error, but I want to make sure that this is clear regardless. Ryuji would have spent a total of 350 XPz, with a remaining usable balance of 385 XPz, but he would still have a total of 735.

Please respond here once you've cleared up these issues so we can continue with the approval process!

[Blushing z0ro]

Thanks for the response Jade . Added a description of the Aspect. As for the Xpz it was intended to be just the available Xpz rather than the actual total of the character. Which i have clarified in the app now.

[Jade]

Alright, so! Up here at the start, I'm going to point out that your XPz calculations at the bottom of the post are still incorrect, because Ryuji does not have 735 XPz available. According to his profile, he has 585 XPz available, as he's spent 150 XPz before these purchases. While this is ultimately not a big deal, it is important for record-keeping to make sure these things are represented correctly - and it will help with things in the future, in the event that a mix-up like this could result in being unable to afford things you're attempting to purchase for a character.

Regardless... Unfortunately, we're not good to go just yet. After getting some second opinions from other members of staff, we're in agreement that the Power Attacks Aspect would not justify the effect presented in Shinkuuhazan. The Aspect itself is fine and approvable, but it would not grant Ryuji any ability to generate sonic booms or vacuums; that sort of thing would exist in the realm of its own Aspect.

Do what you will with this information; you could either go for an Aspect that would enable the Technique you're going for, or change the Technique to be one that actually uses the Aspect you're applying for. Once you've made your changes, please respond here so we can continue with the approval process.