[SUB] Chasing the Wind [SUB]

[Sam]

Thread Title/Link:– Chasing the Wind
Location/Mission Number:– Logue Town, East Blue
Total Post/Word Count:– 39
Brief Synopsis:– Koda a silly but mildly depressed Cipher Pol Agent is sent to track down a no-nonsense pirate known as Risa. Upon meeting eachother they end up in a cat and mouse chase through the Pirate King's birthplace.

Character Name/Link:– Koda Yukinaga-Kamealoha
Individual Post Count:– 20
X-Poinz at Submission:– 300 xpz
Notable Feats:–

▪︎ Chased after Risa through crowded streets
▪︎ Nearly defeated Risa with Shigan
▪︎ Danced around Risa with Soru
▪︎ Grabbed onto Risa in a zombie-like state
▪︎ Didn't give up until the end

Character Name/Link:– Votanna F. Risa
Individual Post Count:– 19
X-Poinz at Submission:– 520 xpz
Notable Feats:–

▪︎ Evaded Koda
▪︎ Cleverly used hostages to get around
▪︎ Survived a Shigan to the chest
▪︎ Cleverly exploited Koda's weakness
▪︎ Managed to escape the island


Note: Some feedback would be appreciated but is not required! Thanks guys yall the best! ^^

[Vio]

^{I'll be handling this one today!}

[Vio]

^{THE FINAL SCORES ARE IN!}

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^{Sam as Koda Yukinaga-Amealoha!}

X-Poinz Gained: 230 X-Poinz

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New Total X-Poinz: 530

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^{risaka as Vontanna F. Risa!}

X-Poinz Gained: 218 X-Poinz

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New Total X-Poinz: 739
Congratulations! You’re now eligible for D Class FiSts and a new Trait!

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{Feedback:}
<sub>I will be entirely honest, I don’t feel there’s a lot of feedback I can give you on this one. To me, this thread started rather chaotically and felt disjointed in several ways, but that quickly faded once we got into into the meat of the matter! Once the chase had properly started, seeing the odd back and forth between Koda and Risa made for an incredibly entertaining read!

Perhaps my biggest issue later in the thread was more specific to risaka, which was the portrayal of some of Risa’s abilities using her Devil Fruit. I definitely think you can use this thread’s events as a building point for some future Techniques, because some of the uses were pretty close. Overall, I can’t really complain too much: Why?

Because this was a hilarious read! Risa’s good fortune and the use of convenient plot devices on both your parts really sold the chase. Sometimes I wanted to play Yakety Sax to fit, but soon enough it felt a lot more serious, only to switch back to the comedic yet desperate interactions! Overall, a highly enjoyable read! I laughed at so many moments, from Risa’s daring donkey escape, to zombie-man Koda, even to the last hurrah!

Finally, props to both of you for really selling the Chasing The Wind thematic, intentionally or otherwise!</sub>

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