Deman Reeves' FiSts and Techniques

[pepsi]

Character's Name: Deman Reeves
Profile: link
Devil Fruit: None
Current XPz: 669

I am upgrading one FiSt from E to D.

Name: School of the White Tiger
Focus: Swordfighting, Iaido, Fighting with the Scabbard
Rank: D
New Aspect: Roaring Tiger
Through the careful study of acoustics, fluid dynamics and the biology of animals capable of roaring, Deman developed a way to generate waves of pressure throughout his body through careful twitching of his muscles, and amplify them through propagation in a catalyst - such as a sword, an elongated object or an acoustic resonator. The waves are too weak right after generation, but they become effectively damaging after being projected outwards into the form of a shockwave. Deman has achieved a form of control over the shape of these waves so fine, he can even mimic the shape and function of a flying slash by flattening the shockwaves along an axis.
These pressure waves have a tendency to sound like an animal's roar, and are generally very loud.

And with the associated Rebate, I'd buy this:

Name: 白虎の轟然牙 - Byakko no Gozen Kiba
Fighting Style: School of the White Tiger
Aspect: Roaring Tiger
Rank: 2
Description: Though twitching of his muscles, Deman generates a series of pressure waves that propagate into the weapon or object he's holding. Then, he brings the weapon forward in a punching motion; the stored energy is released and amplified by the weapon, and is projected outwards in the form of a shockwave that blasts a large area in front of him.
Lighter objects and creatures that aren't tied to the ground can be pushed backwards from the blast's power.
Translation: "Roaring Fang of the White Tiger".

Finally I would like to rename two techniques:

"Byakko no Hige" to "白虎の髭 - Byakko no Hige"
"Byakko no Tsume" to "白虎の爪 - Byakko no Tsume"

I would also add, by the end of all the techniques' description, the translation of the name as I have done in the first technique of this post.

And finally, I'd like to add "Inhuman Speed" to the traits, as the D-Class bonus trait.

[Jade]

Just to be clear on what's happening here - Roaring Tiger allows for the delivery of shockwave-style attacks through a medium, correct? At the moment, this reads a little bit as a two-in-one Aspect, where Deman is able to both create melee-range shockwaves through his blade and project them for long-range assaults. If that reading is correct, then I'm afraid you'll need to make a choice between the two. On the other hand, you could combine this Aspect's affect with a "Flying Slash"-style Aspect later on for the same effect.

[pepsi]

I would want to have the long-range effect only, now. I should specify that the vibrations don't do essentially anything as long as they aren't projected outside, into the medium; there is a sentence that probably gets close to explaining this but I will specify more.

For what concerns "melee" I already have the next Aspect in mind to cover for it - essentially going into high frequency and doing a vibro-knife effect. In the next aspect (if I understand correctly your correction), I will include that the vibrations become effectively damaging even on contact with the weapon.

EDIT: Changes were done.

[Jade]

Apologies for the further delay. After reviewing the Aspect again, it reads as if the "flying slashes" are shockwaves, or rather, "pressure waves". If you could tighten up the wording to make it explicitly clear that this is what is actually happening, I think we'll be on to a winner; at the moment, this still reads a little too close to being a two-in-one Aspect for comfort.

[pepsi]

I have made the requested changes, hopefully it's more clear now. I have also changed the name of the technique.

[Jade]

Alright, everything seems good now! Approved. Please make sure you update Deman's profile appropriately.

[pepsi]

I would like to buy the following FiSt and spend the Rebate for a Tech.

Character's Name: Deman Reeves
Profile: link
Devil Fruit: None
Current XPz: 749

Name: School of the Black Tortoise
Focus: Precise Strikes, Fishman Kendo
Rank: D
Description: This fighting style was developed by Deman in order to offer a wider variety of attacks, and was based on an almost extinct style of the same name.
Originally, this fighting style was dedicated entirely to the deity Genbu the Black Tortoise, who dominates over water and oceans. As such, attacks are supposed to flow freely, without the constraint of having to sheathe and unsheathe the weapon between hits for maximum effect. One very relevant characteristic of this fighting style is that it tends to use the pointy end of the weapon to hit the opponent rather than the blade, while the body of the blade itself is used to parry incoming hits for the most part. For this reason, while Deman adopts this fighting style, he generally holds his weapon with the edge facing towards himself.
New Aspect: Fishman Kendo
Fishmen and Tritons are renowned for their ability to blend water-bending and water based attacks into their fighting styles. In particular, one of the most popular is Triton Jujitsu, whose main focus is to bend bodies of water to the fighter's will.
After extensively studying the techniques and the characteristics of Triton Jujitsu, Deman managed to incorporate the aspect of water manipulation into his swordfighting techniques. As such, he gained the ability to finely control and redirect water that comes into contact with his blade, and exploit this ability for his own attacks.

Name: 玄武の水鱗尾 - Genbu no Mizu Rinbi
Fighting Style: School of the Black Tortoise
Aspect: Fishman Kendo
Rank: 2
Description: While his weapon is in contact with water or is covered in water, Deman quickly sweeps in front of himself, slashing the air. Through application of the fine water-bending techniques of Fishman Kendo, this slashing maneuver unleashes a blade of water that propagates for many meters before losing compactness and height, splashing into the ground.
Translation: "Water Scaled Tail of the Black Tortoise".

I'm not entirely sure about how fishman karate or triton jujitsu work. The above comes from my understanding of these styles which might be limited or wrong so please do point me in the right direction.

[Fox]

Looks like everything's in order here. I'm going to stamp this Approved! So go ahead and update your profile.

[pepsi]

Actually, I would like to scrap that tech in favour of the following one.

Name: 玄武の水流一本背負い - Genbu no Mizuryu Ipponzeoi
Fighting Style: School of the Black Tortoise
Aspect: Fishman Kendo
Rank: 2
Description: This technique can be used by Deman while his blade is in contact with a body of water. Taking inspiration from the Fishman Jujutsu of a similar name, he slashes with the weapon - typically over his head. The water will then follow the motion of his blade, resulting into a powerful stream of water that follows the upwards direction of the slash; the stream, at maximum power, is strong enough to sweep away an object of weight similar to Deman's. The more water is around Deman when he is executing this technique, the stronger the stream is, the more water is displaced, and the farther it can go.
Translation: "Water Lift of the Black Tortoise".

It's an adaptation of Jimbe's Kairyu Ipponzeoi. Let me know if this is a passable technique, if it has to be nerfed somehow.

[Fox]

Alright. Well. You can do this the one time, but we don't normally allow tech swapping so just bear that in mind. The old one is nixed and this one is Approved.

Also, in the future, please include the cost of your purchases in your application.

[pepsi]

Character's Name: Deman Reeves
Profile: link
Devil Fruit: None
Current XPz: 818

After the recent system changes, I come to rework everybody's favourite tiger.

First, I would like to remove the Light-Footed Trait. In its place, I would put:

Unbreakable
While his overall constitution doesn't immediately give it away, Deman has learned to actually take a sustained beating without yielding to pain. He feels the same amount of pain as anyone else, however through years of whippings and hard labor in his years as a slave he developed the nearly superhuman ability to shrug it all off, and continue on.
This is particularly useful as it's very difficult to gain anything from him through physical torture.

As per the aforementioned changes, he gets another trait (so that ad D-Class, he has a total of four).

Untiring
By pushing his body to the limit, Deman has learned to extend the period of time at which he forces his physiology to run at max capacity. While in the past he needed to collect a lot of energy to produce a single active burst, he now has the ability to use the energy much more efficiently over a much longer interval of time.
This allows him to run at full speed for minutes, fight at his peak for longer, or perform an activity all night without rest.

If possible I would also like to edit the description of the last technique that was approved into the following:

Name: 玄武の水流一本背負い - Genbu no Mizuryu Ipponzeoi
Fighting Style: School of the Black Tortoise
Aspect: Fishman Kendo
Rank: 2
Description: This technique can be used by Deman while his blade is in contact with a body of water. Taking inspiration from the Fishman Jujutsu of a similar name, he slashes with the weapon forwards, typically over his head, projecting the water in some direction. The water will then follow the motion of his blade, resulting into a powerful stream that follows the upwards direction of the slash. The more water is around Deman when he is executing this technique, the stronger the stream is, the more water is displaced, and the farther it can go; the stream can be strong enough to sweep away whatever is unfortunate enough to find on its path. The stream's very tip might also split in two, resembling the mouth of a snake ready to eat their prey.
Translation: "Water Lift of the Black Tortoise".

The edits made are primarily for clarity, but also a visual change by the end (the snake head).

[Fennec]

heyyyy! pepsi! its a peepo! 
Okay! Seriously, lets look over this... hmhm...
Okay! This is good! Deman's changes are hereby...

APPROVED!