Dagon Basqiat's Techniques

[viruswithshoes]

Character Name & Profile Link:Dagon Basqiat
Devil Fruit Link:
Character Class & Exp: D 375/500
Advanced Ability Requested: Rokushiki XFS
Total Cost: 0


Character Name & Profile Link: Dagon Basqiat
Devil Fruit Link: N/A
Class & Exp: D 375/500
Techniques Requested:

8. Rankyaku (Beginner)

9. Geppou (Beginner)

Tech Upgrades Requested: No
Tech Deletions Requested: Nope
Tech Variations Requested: N/A
Total Cost: 0

I changed the links EJ

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Everything checks out, viruswithshoes! Enjoy your new fighting style and techniques!

Transaction Approved!

[viruswithshoes]

Character’s Name: Dagon Basqiat
Profile: link
Devil Fruit: Sake Sake No Mi
Current X-Poinz: 304 XPZ

Name: Soru
Fighting Style: Rokushiki
Focus: Hand to hand combat.
Rank: 2
Description: User is able to move at high speeds through many ultra-fast kicks to the ground.
Cost: 125 (+75 XPZ Rebate)

Name: Nano Fish Palm
Fighting Style: Drunken Kaiju
Focus: Hand to hand combat. Water manipulation.
Rank: 2
Description:A powerful palm strike that creates shockwaves in an enemy's internal fluids that only requires one inch of movement to be effective.
Cost: 125 (+75 XPZ Rebate)

Name: Bone Kraken
Fighting Style: Drunken Kaiju
Rank: 2
Focus: Hand to hand combat.
Description: A bone breaking maneuver whereby Dagon uses his alcohol body to wrap parts of his body around intercepted punches and kicks and swiftly break them.

Cost: 125 Rebate (Rebate XPZ now 25)

Total Cost: 375 XPZ. 125 Rebate XPZ.


54 Current XPZ and 25 Rebate XPZ after purchase.

[Fox]

Hi viruswithshoes! Just to be clear, are you using Account Rebate to pay for those techniques?

Additionally! I don't see a Devil Fruit Trait or Fighting Style in your profile, which leads me to think that Dagon hasn't yet eaten his fruit? One of your techniques suggests that Drunken Kaiju is that Devil Fruit Fighting Style, but the Fighting Style makes no mention of the fruit!

If you're trying to use your Fruit rebate, it should be noted that you can only use that on techniques incorporating your Devil Fruit.

Hit me with a reply when you're ready for me to look again - and - if you have any questions, please feel free to ask here or in the site's discord site-questions channel.

[viruswithshoes]

Yes, I'd like to use my 150 account rebate for my purchases for the last technique. My profile link has been updated with info integrating his devil fruit into his traits. Please let me know if I have left anything out or have made any errors.
Thank you.

[viruswithshoes]

Yes, I'd like to use the account rebate for my purchases for the last technique. My profile link has been updated with info integrating his devil fruit into his traits.

[Fox]

Okie doke, well, there are some issues that we're gonna have to hash out because it looks like your profile is quite old. So, we're gonna bring it up to speed! We'll go bit by bit. I'll say your Devil Fruit trait is fine. Next up this!

Name: Rokushiki
Focus: Speed. Power.
Class: D
Description: A World-Government martial art made up of six techniques capable of nearly inhuman feats.
Aspect: Elemental: Lightning.
Cost: 200 XPZ

I need a bit more in the description of this fighting style. Also, please include "martial arts" or "hand-to-hand" in your focus. As for your Aspect, I actually genuinely need more than a single word for it. I need you to explain how you're accomplishing it whether through electrifying spirit or static electricity. I just need an in world explanation for how they developed and apply this aspect.

Name: Drunken Kaiju
Focus: Manipulating water.
Class: D
Description: A Fishman karate/street-fighting hybrid performed in a fluid and unpredictable manner, like a drunkard.
Aspect: Subaqueous Gehena: The manipulation of the water inside of an opponent's body or in the atmosphere.
Cost: 200 XPZ

This is what I understand to be your Devil Fruit fighting style, but you don't make mention of it here at all. Please flesh out the description, perhaps add "martial art" or "Devil Fruit" to the focus. I'm also going to need the aspect fleshed out a little more as well as its just a pinch vague on what it allows the user to do.

Onto techniques...

Name: Soru
Fighting Style: Rokushiki
Rank: 2
Description: User is able to move at high speeds.
Cost: 125 (+75 XPZ Rebate)

Name: Rankyaku
Fighting Style: Rokushiki
Rank: 2
Description: A flying slash created through forcefully lashing with the arms or legs.
Cost: 0 XPZ (125 XPZ Free Technique)

These two are just incorrect. Please refer to the official definitions provided by the dojo.

Rankyaku (“Storm Leg”)
By kicking with sufficient speed and strength, the user can generate a slicing projectile of compressed air, similar to a swordsman’s Flying Slash Attack. As with Geppō, restraining the user makes it almost impossible to use Rankyaku properly, if at all.

Soru (“Shave”)
By kicking the ground multiple times in the blink of an eye, the user can move at such speeds that they become practically invisible to those incapable of tracking high speed movements, making them seem to disappear. Again, Soru is negated if one can somehow bind the would-be user’s legs, or otherwise weigh them down.

Geppo isn't listed in your profile though your tracker says you have it, so please add it.

Geppō (“Moon Step”)
By kicking the air with sufficient speed and force, you can remain aloft so long as your stamina allows you to, and even propel yourself in different directions to remain mobile in order to evade and attack. Geppō can be hindered substantially by weighing the user down or binding their legs in some way.

Your Tekkai is also incorrect.

Name: Tekkai
Fighting Style: Rokushiki
Rank: 2
Description: A defensive technique that hardens up the muscles and iron-like hardness in order to mitigate some damage. While the technique is active the user is unable to move. Can be broken with intense power. Lighting can be added to make it an offensive ability.
Cost: 125 XPZ

To add your aspect to this would be a new technique that is Rank 3. Please refer to the dojo for the standard Tekkai.

Tekkai (“Iron Mass”)
Tensing their muscles, the user becomes an unmoving mass as hard as iron, able to absorb attacks that would otherwise cause significant damage to their forms. Tekkai is an effective defence against solid attacks, though sufficient power or attacks that don’t rely on force alone can overwhelm it.

I can't approve or help you rework your other techniques until you provide some clarity on Drunken Kaiju's aspects.

Sorry for the length of this reply! Lemme know when you get through all of this and I'll take another look! If you need any help or have any questions, you can always ask here or on the site's discord server via the official #site-questions channel.

[Fox]

viruswithshoes Just a little reminder that this is here and awaiting a response from you.

[viruswithshoes]

Apologies for the wait. I have decided to do a hard reset for Dagon later. Thank you for your time. Sorry to have wasted it.

[Fox]

Understood! Thanks for letting me know! You may consider a Soft Reset for Dagon if you want to maintain his history and some of his XPz. Anyway, until next time!