Solo Submission: Unconquered Sun

[Raab]

Log: Unconquered Sun

Character Name: Iskandar

Number of Words: 3,822

EXP: 0 / 150

Summary: After his troubling stay on Pirate's Market, Iskandar begins to question his Aunt's motives in the retrieval of a set of unique books. After reading through them, Iskandar learns some valuable information concerning Dial engineering and the various techniques involved in its practice. Working through the night, the young librarian manages to construct a device known as a Sol Battery, which absorbs and stores solar energy in order to generate electricity.

[odango]

I will grade this.

You are now the second task on my list. Won't take that long. Stand by. :3

[odango]

-------->Grade



Character: Iskandar

Grade -- 34 / 38: I truly, truly, TRULY enjoyed reading this. I now want my character to be into the Sol Battery scene. You have a great way of making this character relatable and even the slightest actions interesting. There were no slow moments in the log. The only thing I wanted more was (as per usual with me) a bit more love for the surrounding detail. I wanted to know what the books really looked like, what was around him - even if it were to be just the desk and loot beneath it.
Very good! Very, very good!

Final Results

---->Character 1: 0 + 34 = 34/150;





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