The Great Domino Effect #90 [sub]

[Shinku]

Plot Title/Link: The Great Domino Effect
Mission Number: #90
Total Number of Posts: 112
Plot Summary:
- A golden picture frame gets stolen without any hints on who might be the culprit (it was a mischiefious Panda)
- The stolen good falls into the hands of a pink-haired teenager and although only for a short time, it's enough to bring him into trouble
- A dark-haired teenager sees his chance for some pocket money
- A hunt begins
- The fight in the amusement park brings a Marine Captain into the picture
- Escapes are short-lived and after a serious fight between Pluto and Kyou, the later gets arrested.
- Turns out the picture is bigger than it seemed at first and there's a lot going on behind the scenes.
- Marines good and bad are on the move
- Pluto's sister gets caught up in the ongoings as well which brings down the wrath of the Bat Boy on the offender
- Things get resolved



Character Name/Link: Celestial body that was degradated to dwarf and kicked out of the fancy club for the big snobby planets
Number of Posts: 55
Experience: 3061/5500 EXP A Class
Poinz Reward %: 0%
Feedback: No

Character Name/Link: Panda who believes himself to be a man in a panda suit (and no one will be able to convince me otherwise!!)
Number of Posts: 13
Experience: 1119/1500 Exp C Rank
Poinz Reward %: 100%
Feedback: No

Character Name/Link: Name could be written with the Kanji for "Today" but it's much more likely written with the one meaning "Bad Luck"
Number of Posts: 56
Experience: 1198/1500 Exp C Class
Poinz Reward %: 0%
Feedback: I would appreciate some Keywords of what was good or bad if anything sticks out.

Character Name/Link: Taraxacum albidum
Number of Posts: 12
Experience: 605/1500 EXP C Rank
Poinz Reward %: 0%
Feedback: No

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{Hint}
From top to the bottom: Pluto, Maru, Kyoukichi and Dan

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Time for me to really earn my stripes! >

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-------->Individual Ratings!

Pluto (BlacKitten) -- 4/5

Maru the Panda (BlacKitten) -- 4/5

Kyou (Shinku) -- 3/5

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The Good:

• Creative with the ways you stuck to Kyou's theme of "endless bad luck!"
• Worked in harmony with Kiwi to craft the story instead of having him lead or vice-versa.

The Bad:

• Many spelling and grammatical errors throughout the entire thread.
• Too much "secondary information" in the middle of sentences in parenthesis. Try to find ways to incorporate it into the writing in a flowing way, even if you have to end a sentence and speak about it in the following sentence.
• Need to spellcheck and proofread posts more often to make them a much smoother read.

Delion Dan (Shinku) -- 3/5

Errors in Template:

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Totals and Endzone!

---->Pluto: 3,336/5,500;
Details:

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EXP at Time of Submission: 3,061
Base EXP Earned: 55 * 1 = 55
Bonus EXP Earned: 55 * 4 = 220
New EXP Total: 3,061 + 55 + 220 = 3,336

---->Maru the Panda: 1,132/1,500;
Details:

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EXP at Time of Submission: 1,119
Base EXP Earned: 13 * 1 = 13
Bonus EXP Earned: 13 * 4 = 52 [All becoming Poinz]
New EXP Total: 1,119 + 13 = 1,132

---->Kyou: 1,422/1,500;
Details:

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EXP at Time of Submission: 1,198
Base EXP Earned: 56 * 1 = 56
Bonus EXP Earned: 56 * 3 = 168
New EXP Total: 1,198 + 56 + 168 = 1,422

---->Delion Dan: 653/1,500;
Details:

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EXP at Time of Submission: 605
Base EXP Earned: 12 * 1 = 12
Bonus EXP Earned: 12 * 3 = 36
New EXP Total: 605 + 12 + 36 = 653

Please update your profiles!

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