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[Kami-Gaz]

Fennec

[Fennec]

Okay this looks better, Kami-Gaz. Approved!

[Kami-Gaz]

Character’s Name:– Rakka
Profile:– strawhatforum.proboards.com/thread/26457/rakka-hoshiko-updated
Devil Fruit:– Yuu Yuu No Mi 
Current X-Poinz:– 1,382

Devil Fruit Enhancement: Reflexive Transformation

Name:– Rokushiki
Focus:– Rokushiki Training
Rank:– D
New Aspect:– Tekkai Mastery- Rakka has trained extensively with his body and the use of Tekkai to the point of mastery, allowing him to alter the very way Tekkai is used to how he needs or wants it. This allows true versatility in the way he utilises his training.

Techniques

(New Tech)
Name:– Cobra Kiss
Rank:– 2
Description:–Rakka completes a completes an attack however instead of following through with a punch he pulls his fist back an inch and quickly performs a one inch punch He then performs a One Inch Punch with oil surging from his forearm down to his fist to cause a second punch with a shockwave. On this punch he follows it through to ensure it gets the maximum power. This is a double barrel move… a combo move that can follow on from most punch based attacks and can be done without a prior move.
Aspect: Shockwave Punch

Upgrade Tech
Name:– Pearlescent Shedding
Fighting Style:– Rokushiki
Rank:– 3
Description:– Rakka activates his Tekkai on reflex at the same time he transforms his body into oil to avoid a blow. This causes him to slide back and leave a perfect clone of himself in oil around the attacker’s weapon or fist. Due to the Tekkai the oil makes the attacker get stuck temporarily so Rakka can perform a counter.
Aspect: Tekkai Mastery

Upgrade Tech
Name:– Reactive Tekkai
Fighting Style:– Rokushiki
Rank:– 3
Description:– Rakka has trained his ability to enter Tekkai so much that he can now enter Tekkai as easily as breathing. He enters Tekkai the instant before a blow is to hit him and relaxes out of it the instant after. This allows him the ultimate defence and mobility as he is not burdened by the stiffness of Tekkai. Though this only works for attacks he knows are coming and is anticipating.
Aspect: Tekkai Mastery

XPZ used:
Total: 1,382
Already used: 925
-150 (Reflexive Transformation)
-200 (Rokushiki Aspect)
-100 (Reactive Tekkai)
New Total used 1375

Rebate:
Previous total: 50
+50 (Reflexive Transformation)
+125 (Rokushiki Aspect)
-125 (Cottonmouth Strike: Cobra Kiss)
-100 (Pearlescent Shedding)
New total: 0

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Character’s Name:– William Savage
Profile:– strawhatforum.proboards.com/thread/26859/wlliam-savage-update
Devil Fruit:– N/A
Current X-Poinz:– 835

Name:– Frusta-fu
Focus:– Whip Based Combat
Rank:– D
New Aspect:– Lightspeed Impacts (Explosive Impacts)- Billy has learned to crack his whip in such a way that the very tip of his weapon achieves a blue shift. His attack lands fast and a bright flash of light shines from the point of impact before the force repels the target due to the explosive energy that can burn the target.

Name:– Skill To Skull
Focus:– Headbutts
Rank:– D
New Aspect:– Power Attacks: Billy has a reserve of power that he unleashes to break materials with his attacks that would be difficult by any other means.

Techniques
Name:– Lanza de luz
Fighting Style:– Frusta-Fu
Rank:– 2
Description:– Billy attacks his target with the whip using his recently mastered ability to push the very tip to speeds that approach light. It impacts the target causing a blinding explosion of light that knocks the target away with some serious damage.

Name:– Giga Impact Skull
Fighting Style:– Head To Head
Rank:– 2
Description:– Billy hits the target with a headbutt that is strong enough to break harder materials with ease.


XPZ spent:
-275 (Old total spent)
-200 (Frusta-fu Lightspeed impacts)
-200 (Skull To Skull Power attacks)
New Total spent: 675

Rebate:
+125: (Frusta-fu Lightspeed impacts)
+125 (Skull to Skull Power attacks)
-125 (Lanza de luz)
-125 (Giga Impact Skull)
Total: 250

[Fox]

So, Kami-Gaz, Billy's stuff is Approved.

As a note, please add a section to Techniques that use Aspects that actually lists out the Aspects the Technique is using. It just helps.

Onto Rakka's stuff! So your Aspect, Tekkai Mastery - Reactive Tekkai reads either like a passive Aspect - which doesn't exist and isn't allowed - or a technique. Either way, its not a valid Aspect as it stands.

Cobra Kiss Cottonmouth Strike... I'm not entirely sure what you're trying to do here or what Aspects are at play to make this R3. It reads like its only using your Shockwaves aspect to achieve this which would make it R2, but its an upgrade of an existing Shockwaves Technique which is already R2, so I'm just a little befuddled. If you could clarify, I'd appreciate it.

Pearlescent Shedding is a bit of an odd one. I need to consult with the council more on it, but please go ahead and address the things I've already mentioned and then hit me up with a reply!

[Kami-Gaz]

Fox I have made some changes i think you should peer over.

[Fox]

Alrighty, Kami-Gaz!

Cottonmouth Strike: Cobra Kiss is fine even if I think you're limiting yourself a bit unnecessarily.

Pearlescent Shedding needs to be R3 because it builds off of Tekkai which is R2 via an Aspect. Similarly, Reactive Tekkai also needs to become R3 and use the Tekkai Mastery Aspect to build off of base Tekkai.

Fortunately for you, this actually makes things a little less expensive you for all in all because it'll only take 100 XPz each to upgrade from Tekkai. Go ahead and make the changes and we'll get you sorted out.

[Kami-Gaz]

Fox Well well well. I think we have progress. I did some editing to not limit the Cobra Kiss tech, changed the prices and redid my maths

[Fox]

Looks like the math checks out and so do the techs! Approved!