Syphalia - Haki Training [Submission]

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I'm submitting these together since they go together. Also for the purposes of it being haki training, I think they are best graded as a pair rather than singly by different graders.

Log Link/Title Spiritual Games: Haki Training (Part 1)
Number of Words: 8464

Log Link/Title Underwater Dangers: Haki Training (Part 2)
Number of Words: 9125

Pirate Name/Link: Syph

Current Bounty: 87,500,000

EXP: 1826/3000

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Claimed

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-------->Grade 77/85 XP

-------->Grade 83/92 XP



Character: Syphalia

Grade -- 77 /85 for Part 1 83/92 for Part 2: The interactions between Syph and Shah developed their personalities and made for an entertaining read. The mix of Syph's determination paired well with Shah's more easy-going nature and balanced things out nicely.

The training and Syph's progression seemed a little fast but not outside of the typical anime. You did well at making the training sound rigorous and difficult so the shorter learning time wasn't quite a shock. The haki explanations were well expressed and the training seemed like feasible ways to awaken one's haki, despite how mysterious it is.

Within a relatively short space you have managed a good deal of character and plot development. At times there could have been more description and some more flair in the prose. Very good, but not perfect.

Final Results

---->Syphalia:1826 + 77 + 83 = 1986/3000; Bounty/Rank Awarded? No.





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