Post by .::Haseo On The Clouds::. on May 5, 2010 23:58:28 GMT -5
A burst of blue and white came crashing down, two simultaneous beams from unknown sources, aimed to completely demolish the attempted cast of Kido dead in its tracks. Each one that had been cast would only meet the formidable opponent of its higher counterpart as two feminine voices called out from the darkness.
"Look, Momo; he looks as though he's really good at Kido."
"Strange... to be able to perform and combine so many forms of Kido at one time... yet, he's only an intermediate level user of Kido."
"Yea, confused me a bit too..."
And with that monologue situation, the two representatives of Squad Five made their entrance visible within the training barracks. Long crimson hair flowed down the far shorter woman whose shoulders were covered by the Captain's robe. With that trademark red scarf worn around her neck and covering some parts of her chin and mouth, her brows lowered a bit in frustration toward the man who attempted to use such quick casting spells at one time.
"Nevertheless..." Kyra stated as she began to mutter softly. A hue, ever faint, began to flutter around her form as she recited an incantation. Her eyes widened as her arm shot outward toward Haru. "Bakudō 64; Sajo Sabaku!"
With an extension of her right arm, the chain-like reiatsu shot outward. Those golden links snaked their way through the air at a fast pace, intending to completely wrap themselves around the other Kido user.
"Let me explain a few things to you," Kyra announced as she approached the Shinigami. "As an Intermediate Kido user, at Mid-Level Average, it would be close to impossible to produce the amount of Kido you have done in such a short amount of time. Not only that, but easily skipping the incantation in order to provide for such a multitude of technique is near impossible for someone at your level."
"Rounin-sama is right," Momo nodded her head as she brought a hand to her chest. "It took me a great deal of time to be able to not only skip the incantations all together without loosing such an abundance of strength of each spell, but also to combine the spells in which you have done yourself."
"That's correct," Kyra nodded her head. "Secondly, you've provided a multitude of attacks in a single thread. While it may be assumed that the secondary person within this thread could provide a proper response to each attack that you've provided, it is highly recommended that beginner level writers, such as yourself, simply stick to the simplicity of writing in general, to which I mean, stick to the basics. What I mean is, keep it simple. Stop trying to pile your attacks on, as you have done so in this thread. Not only do you force your opponent to respectfully reply to each individual attack that you have attempted, but you're also in a three-way battle. These types of battles are very hard to predict, and it's fairly simple to get lost in these types of fights. Making multiple-attacks in a single post is only recommended for advanced writers, or for those who have already plotted out the battle at hand. I can only assume that this battle has not been planned prior to the above post."
"Also," Momo raised a hand. "The last sentence of your post makes it seem like you've assumed all your attacks have successfully hit. I suggest to never assume that your attack has hit, as it would be considered Godmodding. Such dialog does not even belong at this portion of the thread. You're in the middle of your actions; you have not yet completed them until the reply is made by your opponent. As such, the end of your post should only detail mid-way through the completion of your attempted attacks. The completion should never come until your opponent has made a full reply. If he were to escape, dodge, or even parry each of those Kido spells, then your dialog would not make any sense."
"So now you know," Kyra nodded her head.
"And knowing is half the battle!" Momo chirped, smiling brightly.
"And that concludes our Battle Tech Teaching Lesson of the day."
And with that, the two hastily made their return to their own respective barracks.
