Cornelius Luster [UPDATED]

[Aromancer]

Cornelius Luster

Other Names:– Lux
Epithet:– Luster of the Viola
Height:– 6' 6"
Build:– Tall, slender, soft features
Age:– 20
Gender:– Male
Race:– Human
Occupation:– Musician, Pirate

Bounty/Rank:– None Yet

X-Poinz Record

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X-Poinz Earned:- 1189

• +300 (Starting XPz)
• +121 (Gratuitous Beach Battle)
  
• +126 (When a Glass needs a Lawyer)
  
• +143 (The Bright Pirates are Born!)
• +40 (The Bright and the Beautiful)
• +243 (A Long Lunch)
  

X-Poinz Spent:- 500

• -300 (Doro-Doro no Mi)
  
• -200 (FiSt Upgrade; Doro-Doro Combat E -> D)
  

Rebate X-Poinz Earned:- 275

• +150 (Doro-Doro no Mi)
  
• +125 (FiSt Upgrade; Doro-Doro Combat E -> D)
  

Rebate X-Poinz Spent:- 275

• -200 (Rank 1 Techs; Doro-Doro Piano, Doro-Doro Calando, Doro-Doro Charging Star, Doro-Doro Trill)
  
• -75 (Tech Upgrade; Doro-Doro Trill -> Swamp Roulade)

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Personality

Raised in high society, Cornelius is used to the finer things in life. He's fantastic at appraisal, able to estimate the exact value of an object down to the beri due to his hoity-toity upbringing. He grew up practicing the viola in the hopes of playing in a grand auditorium someday. As a result, he's very ambitious and tends to have unrealistic expectations of his future.

He considers himself quite the lady-killer, and for good reason. His attractive face, dulcet voice, and skill with the viola tend to attract many lovely ladies... before they're turned off by his arrogance and total ignorance of anything not high-society or music related. Not that it matters, as he has eyes for only one woman, and sadly, his feelings are unrequited.

Cornelius is a neat freak, and is obsessed with tidiness and order. Whenever he's not practicing his viola or studying the world's greatest musicians, he's doing his utmost to tidy up his immediate surroundings and ensure everything is as aesthetically pleasing as possible. He finds his Ooze Ooze fruit reprehensible, and only uses it in dire circumstances (and sometimes as a face mask). The only bright side is his skin is extremely smooth and blemish-free as a side-effect of the fruit's power!

Appearance

Cornelius is a tall man who wears a fancy purple coat almost everywhere, draped over his shoulders, with a high black collar. His pants are deep tan dress pants, and his shoes are shiny black loafers. His hair is a short and wavy brown, done up in an expertly-quaffed, slicked-back pompadour. He usually wears large round sunglasses that hide his expression.

His eyes are rarely seen except for when he takes off his sunglasses. When he does, it becomes apparent that they are a bright, piercing blue, outlined with thick mascara. His face is soft and delicate; of particular softness are his lips, and the makeup he usually wears, making him quite the "pretty boy." He often applies a glittery blush to his cheeks to make them sparkle on his clean-shaven face. This face, while attractive, is often marred by an expression of distaste and general disapproval of his immediate surroundings.

Cornelius is an incredibly attractive man, his appeal to the opposite sex (and certain members of the same sex) undeniable. Even without his fancy clothes and makeup, he is a master of seduction due to his natural good looks.

Wherever he goes, Cornelius likes to carry around his viola, a gorgeous mahogany piece with a delicate inlaid design. He keeps it safe within a leather carrying case with the family crest, a swan with wings outstretched, on the front. He has an uncanny ability to pick out counterfeits, and will instantly call out any fakes.

Traits

Ooze Human: strawhatforum.proboards.com/thread/25549/doro-mi-ooze-fruit
Luster bears the Doro-Doro no mi, giving him the ability to create, manipulate, and turn into Oobleck at will.

Inhuman Eyesight: Cornelius has amazing vision, his eyes able to pick out anything from distant shores to minuscule flaws in gems. His upbringing has trained his vision to be far superior to that of "commoners."

Inhuman Hearing: As an expert musician, Cornelius has honed his ears to far beyond those of ordinary humans. This allows him to detect sounds much farther and/or fainter than most others.

Inhuman Toughness: Cornelius is surprisingly tenacious when he's backed up against the wall. His conviction towards those he cares about means that he can take a disgusting amount of punishment when it's for his loved ones. Of course, when it isn't for his loved ones, he crumples like a damp tissue at the merest hint of adversity.

Inhuman Reflexes: Cornelius's reaction times have been honed after numerous close shaves, enabling him to react to incoming attacks faster than an ordinary human would.

Fighting Styles

Name:– Doro Doro Combat

Focus:– Defensive, Strategic
Class:– D

Description:– Use of Ooze-Ooze fruit to protect oneself from harm while wearing the opponent down, then dealing a final blow to defeat them.

    Aspect:- Vibrato. Cornelius has discovered that his viola can create powerful vibrations when he plays it right. These vibrations allow him to alter the density and hardness of his oobleck independent of other stimuli.

Techniques

Name:– Doro Doro Piano
Fighting Style:– Doro Doro Combat
Rank:– 1

Description:– Cornelius throws up a glob of Oobleck in a sheet in front of him to slow incoming attacks.

Name:– Doro Doro Calando
Fighting Style:– Doro Doro Combat
Rank:– 1
Description:– Cornelius throws a glob of Oobleck at the enemy's face to blind them.

Name:– Doro Doro Charging Star
Fighting Style:– Doro Doro Combat
Rank:– 1

Description:– Cornelius forms a shell of oobleck in front of him, then charges forwards. Anyone hit with the Charging Star is covered in Oobleck.

Name:– Doro-Doro Trill
Fighting Style:– Doro-Doro Combat
Rank:– 1
Description:– Cornelius excretes a large amount of Oobleck. This covers the immediate vicinity in a hazardous marsh emanating from his body that he can control at will, throwing up obstacles or spikes wherever he wishes. These obstacles behave like normal oobleck when interacted with.

Name:- Swamp Roulade
Fighting Style:- Doro-doro Combat
Rank:- 2 (upgraded form of Doro-Doro Trill)
Description:- If he plays his viola, Cornelius can exert finer control over certain areas of the "swamp" created by doro-Doro Trill with the vibrations it generates, turning them harder or softer than they would ordinarily be as he wishes. Uses Vibrato.

Background

-- Cornelius Luster was born to a high-society family in the South Blue. He was spoiled all throughout his childhood, and knew very little of suffering and desire. That all changed when one day, he came across a starving little girl begging for him to give her and her brother food. Overcome with sympathy, Cornelius took them to a fancy restaurant. The restaurant refused to admit "riffraff," so he instead bought some nice food and gave it to the children... whereupon they were arrested for carrying "obviously stolen goods."

Disgusted with the society he'd grown up in, Cornelius broke both children out of prison and set them up with a generous foster parent. This, of course, was against the law, and so Cornelius had to run away to the sea to avoid arrest. He stowed away aboard a pirate ship, hiding below deck and fearing for his very life.

He'd spent a couple days there, and the pirates seemed to not intend to touch down on land any time soon, so Luster decided to steal some food lest he die of starvation. Unused to the appearance of common food, he stole a strange tan fruit with a swirly mark emanating from its stem.

It was practically inedible; so dry and starchy that even swallowing a single bite was a tall order. Cornelius didn't realize this was out of the ordinary due to his secluded upbringing, and forced himself to swallow a bite. Suddenly, his body felt... odd. He had unknowingly eaten the Doro Doro no mi, which the ship's captain had been saving until he'd figured out what it was and what it did!

Cornelius was disgusted with his new ability, and resolved to never use it. This resolution was almost immediately broken, as he had to use his new powers in order to not be killed by the enraged captain when he found out about Cornelius. He managed to escape to a small island, where he sought to join a pirate crew to start a new life on the seas, away from the corruption of his childhood.

[Aromancer]

UPDATE: Included Doro Doro Charging Star, an upgraded form of Doro Doro Piano.

[Aromancer]

UPDATE: Changed Cornelius's Inhuman Beauty to Inhuman Hearing, upgraded his FiSt, added three new Techs (Doro-Doro Trill, Swamp Roulade, Slime Field).

[Jade]

^{Sorry about the delay, Aromancer, things have been a little hectic lately. But we'll be continuing our review with Cornelius. Starting from the top and working our way down...}

• ^{Inhuman Hearing
  The last line in this Trait ("This also helps alert him to oncoming dangers much sooner than normal.") reads too much like a "lite" version of Observation Haki. It will need to be removed.}
• ^{Inhuman Flexibility
  At the moment, this Trait reads as if it's doing a lot more than a standard Trait should, and I think it may be because of the extra flavor text tacked on at the end. If you could tighten up its wording so that it's clearer what the actual benefit this Trait provides is, I'll be able to provide a better analysis of it and whether there is anything here that needs fixing.}
• ^{Vibrato
  An Aspect that allows Cornelius to control oobleck that is no longer part of his body as if it were is not viable, and will thus need to be significantly nerfed or removed. General lower-level manipulation may be possible, but to the point of creating fine shapes and such is too much.}
• ^{Doro Doro Piano
  Following the reduction in defensive capabilities of the Fruit, this Technique will need to be redone.}
• ^{Doro Doro Calando
  This Technique will need to be entirely removed, at least in its "suffocation" capacity.}
• ^{Doro Doro Charging Star
  Currently, this Technique is Rank 2 without an associated Aspect. While it will still need to be rewritten to fit in with the reduction in the Fruit's defensive capabilities, it will also need to be dropped in Rank as things are now.}
• ^{Doro Doro Trill
  This Technique may require the most restructuring of all of Cornelius's Techniques, honestly. For a start, it will need to be rewritten to fit in with the alterations to his Fruit - if Cornelius wants to provide solid footing to allies but treacherous footing to foes, his "oobleck swamp" will need to remain a part of his body, and likely an Aspect to maintain such a solid form underfoot.}
• ^{Swamp Roulade
  This will need to be rewritten to match however the Vibrato Aspect is toned down, unless it is changed to continue to work with Doro Doro Trill remaining a part of Cornelius's body to function.}
• ^{Slime Field
  Due to the way in which Vibrato will need to be changed, this Technique is simply not going to be functional. As such, it will need to be removed.}

^{Once you have made the required changes, please respond here so that we can continue with the review.}

[Aromancer]

Hi, Jade. Apologies in advance for what I feel confident is sure to be the worst offender in terms of my characters. I did my best to address all the points you brought up in your analysis, and I also took the liberty of adjusting the X-Poinz Record to one more in line with current acceptable site standards while reevaluating Cornelius's new X-Poinz total. I hope it's to your liking.

On to the points listed:

• Inhuman Hearing no longer stipulates on incoming danger.
  
• I elected to replace Inhuman Flexibility with a less confusing and hopefully more understandable Inhuman Reflexes. I hope this change is to your liking.
  
• I've decided to rework Vibrato so that it only controls the hardness of oobleck. The intention is that Cornelius can use his viola to harden or soften oobleck, but NOT control it's shape. Please let me know if my wording is clear, and whether this is an acceptable revision to the power. This will obviously have knock-on effects to other powers, which I will address in further detail below.
• Doro-Doro Piano: I removed the part that states this move "blocks most attacks." It is now simply an oobleck screen in front of the body that acts as a stone shield in the face of weaker attacks.
• Doro-Doro Calando no longer suffocates it's victims, it just gets in their eyes. For the record, this was never meant to be a lethal technique; I understand that suffocation is too much, however, and will say no more on the matter.
• I reduced Doro-Doro Charging Star to a Rank 1 technique and removed all defensive capabilities from it's description.
• Doro-Doro Trill now specifies that the swamp is "emanating from his body," which I hope clarifies my intention that all oobleck he produces via this technique is still connected to his person and thus manipulable by him. Also, while he can shape the "marsh" at will, he cannot control the terrain like he used to; at least, not with this technique.
  
• Swamp Roulade now uses Vibrato only to control the hardness of the oobleck Cornelius creates with Trill. With Trill, he can make spikes; with Roulade, he can make those spikes harder. My hope is that the new Roulade will allow Cornelius to do the "sinking into the marsh" effect that was previously the purview of Trill and no more.
• Slime Field has been removed.

Once again, let me know if any of these changes are not to your satisfaction, or if you would like further changes to be made before Cornelius can be approved.

[Jade]

<sup>Alright! Things are looking substantially better after that first round of fixes. That said, we still have a few things to go over before we can stamp Cornelius once more.

First, this is a problem less with the changes made to the profile and more in direct response to something in your explanation of the changes - Doro-Doro Piano cannot act as a "stone shield", as you put it, at a base level due to the instated limitations on the hardness of the oobleck that came about with the review of the Fruit itself. If you wish for the hardness of the oobleck to be amplified to such a level, you would need to utilize an Aspect or other method (such as Passive Qualities) to provide that sort of boost to Cornelius's substance.

Now, as for the issue within the profile itself... Vibrato retains some language that will need to be changed out. While I understand the intent, we are aiming to make things crystal clear here for the future - as such, the language about "control[ling] his oobleck to a much finer degree" and "at will" will need to be removed or replaced. He is able to manipulate the density/hardness of the oobleck via playing his viola, which is not "fine control" nor is it "at will".

Once this is cleared up, please respond here so we can continue with the review.</sup>

[Fox]

Hi Aromancer, are you still interested in continuing with this character? Please respond within 7 days or this character will be locked and archived.

[Aromancer]

Fox I seem to have missed the last update from Jade, so I'm sorry for taking so long to respond. Please don't lock Cornelius.

Jade I changed the wording again. Hopfully the new descriptions of Doro-Doro Piano and Vibrato are better.

[Fox]

Hey, Aromancer. If you're still interested in this boy, now would be a good time to rework him - new system style! If you're not, just let me know! I can archive him for you.

[Fox]

I will archive this thread since you've made a new one with Cornelius, Aromancer.