Horan Shigikan

[zorokenpachi]

<Horan Shigikan>

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Other Names:Kuro

Epithet:Kuro Kenshi(Black Swordsman)

Height:1.84 meters/6.0 Feet

Build:Thin-Muscular

Age:19

Gender:Male

Race:Human

Occupation:Pirate/Blacksmith

Bounty/Rank:None



Total X-Poinz:– 300

Used X-Poinz:–
50

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Personality
Horan is a calm guy ,usually pron to fighting since his goal is to become a Warlord or The most Feared Swordsman.So he isn't afraid to fight anyone if it means fame and recongnition is possible to obtain.Brave and smart.Meaning he won't rush like an idiot but he might do something risky if he believes it will succeed.Horan Respects anyone with power and hates weaklings with exception the sick,the wounded or the kids.Anyone above adulthood is responsible for himself and his power according to him.If someone tries to take his special bracelet or his sword ,then they are for a fight.A fierce one.
He doesn't seem anything else than calm when he is fighting or having negotiations but can easily be agitated if someone insults his late sensei or swordsmen.He mostly calculates and takes risks accordingly in a fight,he also might try something underhanded but he is mostly an honorable swordsman.Or atleast that's how he sees himself.

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Appearance
Short-medium length black hair
Scar from his forehead to his left cheek(passing through the left eye)
(Heterochromia)Light blue color left eye,Light green color right eye
Muscular neck and shoulders
Hands are longer than usual and muscular aswell
His legs are very well trained.



Style:
Legs:Black Pants and a Unique HandMade Belt with a small gold circle in the middle of it and the rest is black.The 1 Sword he has is Held by the Handmade Belt.
Boots:Normal black boots with a hidden dagger in both of them.

The sword He carries is a long katana named Nagareboshi which can translate to Falling Star,given to him by his late instructor Hamayoshi.He also keeps a memento from his teacher a gold-white bracelet he keeps on his right hand at all times.

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Traits

#1 Inhuman Strength

Thanks to  intense training regimes  Horan withstood he now has physical might that far surpasses the human norm.He can lift boulders and other great weights that no normal man could hope to.

# 2 Inhuman swiftness: From years of constant training Horan has grained a speed that surpasses that which what normal people call normal.





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Fighting Styles

Surasshusurū(Slashing Through)
Focus: quick accurate and powerful slashes
Description: uses one sword for attacking quickly with power .



Technique:Hyaku Surasshu(100 slashes)
Focus:Fast-Precise melee range slashes
Description:Horan Takes a simple stance near his enemy and starts wobbling left to right.
After gaining some speed he starts slashing every time he is about to reach the middle from each side.
Rank 1[50 x-pointz]



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Background
Haron grew up in Providence Kingdom.His parents died both from the constant wars after King Riku went missing or presumably dead.Haron was 10 when both of his parents died,cursing his own weakess.At the age of 14 he met a master swordsman from the land of Wano and he immediately rushed to him,wanting to become his pupil.The master swordsman was named Hayate Nishin and according to him,Hayate left the country because of the Usurper and the new shogun Kurozumi Orochi.Hayate trained Horan until his 18 birthday where The old Hayate was sick,he gave Horan his sword and the bracelet he made for his wife when he was living in Wano.The next day Hayate died,Horan buried him and mourned him for a week.After that Horan decided to become a pirate to explore the world and become a famous swordsman like his teacher used to be.






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[Suriko]

Okay to be perfectly honest. the whole app could do with a rework. Now I will give some highlights from the issues that I am currently seeing from this application. I will say the overarching issue is lack of detail

• General Info: So minor thing first. I know that is likely meters, bnut even still it'd be nice to have a unit of measurement there as we have people who would have no clue what just 1,84 would mean
• Personality: Typically with personalities, we like to see a bit more. Like what are some of their flaws, what are some of the strengths personality-wise, how do they try to handle themselves mentally in a fight? Stuff like that. All in all, it'd be nice to see a bit more detail into a character.
• Apperance: Similar issue in detail to personality. As it is right now. you're merely listing of noticeable traits. What I'd like to see is to you more paint the picture of this character with your words. Give more detail. Also, Weapons do not go here, they are applied for under combat info. The template and rules for which is Here.
• Combat data: The traits are fine as they more or less express how they work.The fighting style and techs, I once again will refer to where template and rules are, including costs. The Dojo. Because you're not actually able to afford a D class Fighting style yet. And on the note of the fighting style. that once again is another thing that requires a bit more detail to express, what exactly is unique about his style for your character. As well as the tech as I'm not getting a clear picture at what you are trying to do with it here.
• History: Ho boy. This is where some glaring issues you are. First off. same thign as the rest. Detail detail detail. That beign said. This has way too much canon naming and involvement in it to even be viable as a history. I would definitely recommend a full rework of this. maybe go into more about how he met his master. About how the training was. How his parents died. all of that would make this app a bit better.

Well that's all the notes I have for now. Hopefully, that can help you with this character to flesh them out a bit more.

[zorokenpachi]

Hmm i completely understand i just thought it would be better for my first post to be like a background/current position post and explain also how i got the sword/how my parents died etc.
      As for the weapons and combat i had no idead what i was writing.Meaning i didn't know what was allowed and what was not,i asked some people but still didn't quite got it.(The class d was by mistake i wanted to write the lowest which i think is e? or f?)
As for the background i gave a lot of thought into this and i believed that by using the exact locations/exact names and stuff like that i could make my story more lets say easily imaginable.I read from a wiki all the island's history in the new world territory in order to decide where my character's birthplace is gonna be and i read that when King Riku went absent a lot of wars broke out in the providence kingdom and i thought maybe i could use that for my character's backstory.
   So before i change my characters backstory i have some questions.

1. Does it matter where my character's birthplace is?
2. Does it matter what story my character's birthplace has?
3. Should i rely on canon stuff in order to make my background or it doesn't matter?

   4. How can i keep the sword?(Cause im baffled about these stuff.Too complicated for a newbie)
   5. Can i keep updating my character's appearance as i keep posting?(Because the reason i put the         sword in the appearance was because thats how i wanted him to look like)

Those are my questions for now.I will try to improve it as much as i can.

[Suriko]

Dojo

This is where you need to go to read over the rules for fighting styles and Techs. Please read this thread to try and better understand how this all works. I'm not going to try an explain every little aspect of this thread, but I will be willing to answer any questions on the discord server.

Armory

And this is similarly for wrapons. this is how you keep the sword. It does not need to be in the appearance section as it is implied that he'd carry it with him. But weapons also have ranks and various aspects to them. and again, I am willing to answer any questions into detail

as for your other questions. No, it doesn't really matter, just avoid a lot of tie ins to canon as we try to promote originality. And to that end, it could be some ilsand you make up if you want to.

To reiterate. don't rely on canon. Build your character as his own person.

As for updating. you will want to keep the finished app as you'll need to update when you get more XPz through threading as that is how your character progress. and yes you could update changes in appearance.

[Suriko]

Okay. I would like to have some kind of update that this character is still being worked on. I would like to hear back about this by the 23rd, otherwise I'll have to archive the app.